Some dialogue I cut a while ago fit alright here. Kaylin has some items that let her convert her armor and equipment to look like any other equipment. She tested it with the outfit Nyna gave her for several reasons. One of which was because the item used to be a one time use only item. She’s since found out it recharges rather than vanishing.
Ooh, recharging glamours/transmogs? Nice!
Welp, found the resident Destiny 2 player.
What? Dude, I play Destiny 2, but World of Warcraft’s been calling it transmog for years.
I’ve watched more streams of it than I’ve actually played (my low-power Windows laptop couldn’t finish the tutorial, and my desktop is Linux, so *that’s* a no-go).
Wimdy
I think its ment to be taken down quietly, or somthing to that effect. As it it feels like a word is missing as otherwise she is just saying if they can be beaten she isnt intrested, but that doesn’t mean they are weak or easy.
Talked down in this context probably means, that if the threat could be eliminated by only talking with them (like with intimidation), she doesn’t want to fight them. This depends on if these people are non fighting diplomatic staff only or worse. Probably the latter though. On the other hand Kaylin sounds like she doesn’t really want to be discovered at all.
Talked down is correct. She’s expecting Kaylin to talk her way out of trouble if possible to better meet a favorable outcome- for Jack.
Shouldn’t the word LETS in the 4. speech bubble be without that pesky ‘ between T and S?
And that S in ANYWAYS (the last word in the last speech) – isn’t it wrong to have it there?
“Anyways” is acceptable in speech, but wouldn’t be proper in a formal letter or writing. So, good catch, as that is something harder to notice, but while it isn’t proper, it is acceptable.
You have a typo there, in first panel, last word bubble: “let’s” is a contraction for “let us “, like “let’s go” or “let’s boogie”. Third person singular for “to let” is “lets”, no apostrophe.
Also, windy! And a nice spot to plug that explanation for Kaylin’s outfit.
Nyna´s final line should probably better be “then i WOULDN´T BE interested”.
It´s the only way it makes sense to me at least.
It actually works correctly as it is written. There are more than one correct ways to state things of course, but usually they are written how they are meant to be said by a character. Certain characters are more likely to be formal or informal. That said, I do appreciate people pointing stuff out when it appears incorrect, because I do make mistakes all the time!
Artist: [meticulously paints multiple city landscapes]
Readers: [complain about imagined typos in the dialogue]
I love the scene, Sage 😀
this looks kinda romantic
I LOVE the dynamic these two have. Seriously, awesome writing man ^_^
Recharging rather than vanishing?——Sounds like a ‘Blessing From God’ to me . . .
There’s a logical reason to know why they act that way now too, but I will probably never address it in the story as it’s not a vital thing, and it should be discoverable eventually.